Monday, July 15, 2013

Under the……….Creative Challenge 260



Under the tree for shade I will go
I go under the waves to swim
I fall under the spell of cute girls
Under the law we reap what we sew

Under the porch is fun this I know
Discoveries there can be grim
We can scrunch down and roll up in curls
Even in the dark some things still grow

I am taking my girl to a show
The odds of a kiss seem pretty slim
She deserves a necklace made of pearls
I don’t have that much money to blow

Under the tree for shade I will go
I go under the waves to swim
I fall under the spell of cute girls
Under the law we reap what we sew

Tim D. Culey © 2013

My entry this week is a style of poem called La’Tuin, a poetic form which consists of 4-line stanzas with an 'abca, abca' rhyme scheme that is consistent throughout each stanza. The first stanza is repeated at the end of the piece. It contains a minimum of 4 stanzas, with no maximum length limit.

A strict syllable count of 9/8/9/8 is required per stanza.

In-Depth Explanation of rhyme:

Lines 1, 4, 5, 8, 9, 12, 13, 16 etc., all rhyme - this is the 'A' rhyme.
Lines 2, 6, 10, 14 etc, all rhyme - this is the 'B' rhyme.
Lines 3, 7, 11, 15 etc, all rhyme - this is the 'C' rhyme.
The La'Tuin is named after A'Tuin, a giant turtle from the Diskworld series. A turtle is a symbol of Mother Earth

 
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11 comments:

  1. well done, Tim!

    Not sure if I like the poetic style though...I guess we all have our favorites. I believe I would struggle with it...as a result it would show

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  2. It will probably never replace the sonnet, but it is fun to compose when you have to do the 9/8/9/8 syllables and follow the ryhyming pattern. It requires a little more attentin to detail.

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  3. It likely won't be in competition for any awards, but I was trying to demonstrate that even a somewhat obscure form of poetry such as this one can be written in a light hearted tone, just to prove it can be done. Once the ice is broken there will be time to go back and write something of a more serious nature.

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  4. Interesting write Tim. I appreciated your explanation of the La'Tuin too.

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  5. Excellent poem.



    http://www.whisperingcorridors.com/2013/07/under-bridge-creative-challenge-260.html

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  6. Very good, Tim!!

    I have trouble writing any kind of poetry, let alone a style such as this.

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  7. The things you see when you are under the ......

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  8. I was looking under a speading chesnut tree and you won't believe who I saw standing there!

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  9. A beautiful worded take on the theme Tim;)

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